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Hey guys check it out I had to write a poem for my english class (make note an 8th grader and it took me 2 minutes to write):
Whisper
I've been left behind
as a whisper in time
forgotten but not forgiven
for faults not even mine
Any tips? Comments? Questions? Ideas? Anything, I think poetry could become a thing for me!
Peace out,
Yulinford
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Whisper... Does this go here?
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Grae_Face 
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Posted 30 April 2005 - 04:22 AM
A Wise Old Man once said....
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Hax the Cook
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Posted 30 April 2005 - 04:59 AM
Makes sense.... I kinda like it.
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Jesus says:
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~ JGJTan ~ Devils dance while angels smile says:
WOOT
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~ JGJTan ~ Devils dance while angels smile says:
WOOT
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Posted 30 April 2005 - 05:41 AM
I like it too. It kind of ends suddenly though; feels like it should be longer to me.
Those who will remember, will speak fondly of the warm morning breeze.
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Posted 01 May 2005 - 02:17 PM
'tis really good, but isnt this supposed to be a little farther down on the forums?
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Posted 01 May 2005 - 02:34 PM
I like it, I really do, but I think you should add on a few lines before it would be capable of any serious compliments. 
Oh, and rhymes aren't compltely necessary, though you can use 'em if you want.
Oh, and rhymes aren't compltely necessary, though you can use 'em if you want.
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